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So I was reading the speech schedule Sensei handed out and realized that we had been preparing for the speech project for 3 weeks already!! I finally did my speech today and the file above is the audio clip.
The clip sounds worse than what I thought I did...so it was actually a pain to force myself to listen to the whole thing. BUT on the other hand, that's the best way to know what you have to work on. First of all, I definitely have to work on my fluency. Secondly, and more importantly, I need to improve my intonation since I think my tone was really flat throughout the whole thing. Lastly, I think I need to avoid all the little pauses I make after certain particles to make it more natural and "Japanese" like!

Minasan, what do you guys think? Feel free to give me some criticism!! I can stand it!!